Thanks to St, Edmund Hall, Oxford, forum for the challenge and feedback.
“Sonja: cold war
A very evocative counterpoint between poem and image. I enjoyed the command of images and the experiential account of the move from winter into spring, which rang very true for me. The concision of language invites multiple readings and leaves the reader with many things to ponder.
This was an apt application of the imagery of war to the theme of social media. I enjoyed the exploration of which rights we give away and which we should keep to ourselves in the public sphere, as well as the imagery of social media platforms as puppet masters – very true.”
. cold war.
- the boy plays on his own, in water it can’t be helped.
machines work less in cold, sheds and lack of encouragement.
the dream, frost cancelled a while. visitors came, the day proceeded gently with
stops and dictation, who is this?
spring came. each road a picture, slowly staring, visual overload resulting.
i could not breathe
the lime kilns are empty now.